Divorce Part II (Unwanted Romance)

Tuesday, January 20, 2009

First of all thanks to you all for some encouraging and good retort to the first part of this fiction. Those who haven’t read it should read it first; this was my first real attempt on fiction as I prefer writing on real life experiences. In the first part(click here to read first part), we read about a couple Rajeev and Neha in Nagpur fighting over Rajeev’s co-worker divorce and she suspects him at times that her husband might be having some affair with the Pooja (Rajeev’s colleague.) They reach the family court and it was final hearing of divorce case between Puja and Abhisekh, mutually they agree and so does the court. Abhisekh pays money and kids are sent to boarding in Dehradoon.

Scene 1
At the court premises after the case is settled.
Puja: “Oh! Rajeev I am so relaxed today, I got rid of this daily drama now”
"Don’t worry all going to be fine now” Says Rajeev looking both at his wife and puja.
Neha intrudes and disagrees: “its going to be tuff now Puja”
Puja: “You don’t know what I was going through; it’s such a relaxing feeling”
Neha says out of shear curiosity: “so you are planning to resettle?”
Puja putting up strange smile on her face says: “not decided lets see what happens”
Puja leaves to her home and Neha and Rajeev drive back to their home. At night in Nagpur, Rajeev wasn’t able to sleep so went out and smoked and came back to his room where Neha (his wife) is lying down, pretending as she is sleeping.

Neha breaks the deadly silence and says: “You not feeling sleepy?”
Rajeev:”no just a bit headache” Neha: “come let me do head massage”
Rajeev: “no I will be fine” Neha: “come”
Rajeev shouts: ” I said no, can’t you get that”
Neha shivers and says: “what’s there to shout at the middle of night?, why you look tensed? What’s wrong? “
Rajeev: “nothing wrong” Neha: "Ok” Rajeev: "why don’t you sleep off?”
Neha: “no I was thinking about Puja and Abhisekh, poor kids, their life is ruined now, wondering what went wrong in their life? Why both are separated? Why they decided to divorce?”
Rajeev: “why are you so worried?”
Neha: "why you look so tense?”
Rajeev: ” its headache”
Neha: "I hope you are not the reason of this divorce, I wont give you divorce even if Brahma, Vishnu & Mahesh comes and pleads in front of me, I wont leave you, I love you, and you?” Rajeev: “Yes I do too, now sleep off” Both sleep off as mystery surrounds the silent night.

15 DAYS LATER
Scene II

Another usual morning for Neha & Rajeev on the breakfast table.
Neha: “let’s go for outing to Khandala it’s been long time, Monday is off so we can go and take 3 days off”
Rajeev: "No some other time some work”
Neha: "what work? You never say yes now days lost in your own world”
Rajeev: “Please try to understand, we will go some other time”
Neha: “I am hearing this for last one year”
Rajeev hugging his wife: “sure next month”
Neha: “hmmm”



Scene III
It’s a posh duplex flat at suburbs of Nagpur, winter has just settled in, and it’s been good charming day for last week or two. The room’s window opens to beautiful park and lush green surrounding. A large double bed lies at the centre of the room, with decorative lamps on both sides, a centre table lies with a well decorated flower vase on it, and the fragrance of rose is all over the room. The lady in the room has just finished her bath and drying her hair sitting in front of dressing table, seeing her face in the mirror and probably trying to find herself. She feels lonely and decides to play light music

Have I told you lately that I love you
Have I told you theres no one else above you
Fill my heart with gladness
Take away all my sadness
Ease my troubles thats what you do


She gets lost in music and lies on the bed, all of a sudden the phone rings.

She picks up the phone “Are you coming?”
Voice on other side: “yes, in few minutes got stuck in traffic”
“Ok I am waiting” she says keeping the phone.
Gets up and changes her cloth and puts her favorite clothes, combs her hair and listens to music again. She starts feeling sleepy after gazing out of window for few minutes. Calling bell rings, she opens the door and happy to see him as she has been waiting for it for some time now.

“I have been waiting for you for some time now "she says offering him glass of water.
“Sorry I got stuck in traffic” he replies.
“So you took off day” she says switching off the music.
“Yes “he replies looking towards her eyes.
“You had breakfast” she enquires
“Yes I have to and how about you?” he replies and enquires
“I thought will have with you” she says with soft voice putting her hair behind her ears.
“Oh, ok we will have together after some time” he replies
“Ok, I am not that hungry right now” she says
"Why you stopped the music? It was good” he says
And the music starts again as both continue talking

And have I told you lately that I love you
Have I told you theres no one else above you
You fill my heart with gladness
Take away my sadness


They sit together on a sack sofa as fragrance of her perfume moves him nearer to her. He says kissing her neck from back and holding her flat belly: “you look stunning”
She holds him in her arms, eyes closed and surrenders herself to him, romance rapidly excites in the room as both get lost in each other. She puts his hand on his hair playing with it as he kisses her and he picks her in his arm and they both lie down on bed caressing each other and forgetting the world and leaving all their qualms behind . Sooner both are in their own world of love.

After few minutes she says: “what u told to Neha?”
Rajeev: “that I am in office”
Puja: “If she calls there?”
Rajeev says as she rests half on his chest and he continues playing with her hair as her long hair falls on his naked chest: “don’t worry I have instructed to my colleague, he will handle it out”
Puja: “any way she will come to know sooner or later”
Rajeev: “hmm”
Puja: “how long we will continue like this?”
Rajeev:” I have planned something,”
Puja: “what’s that?” Rajeev explains his plan few minutes and she agrees after long discussion as both get up and take break fast.

Human being is just biological animals, it’s just human. We all have the jungle inside of us. We all have wants and needs and desires, strange as they may seem. If you stop to think about it, we're all pretty creative, cooking up all these fantasies. It’s like a kind of poetry. Romantic love is an illusion. Most of us discover this truth at the end of a love affair or else when the sweet emotions of love lead us into marriage and then turn down their flames. One divorce and four lives were in haywire. Puja and Rajeev are in extra-martial affair for some time now and Puja’s divorce was planned by Rajeev and Puja, Abhisekh had clue about it so they agreed to separate. Now its up to these two on how they get settled after unsettling Abhisekh (Puja’s ex-husband) and Neha (Rajeev’s wife) has been suspicious so they needed to act fast before things reaches Neha’s mind's.

TO BE CONCLUDED IN NEXT PART......



57 comments:

Puja said...

If first had comic sense this one has serious drama and Utter romance. Too good
Keep it up!!

Dr. Pragya bajaj said...

romance engulfs as suspense remains..nicely written

Swati said...

liked the romantic part and u suceeded in keeping the suspense in this part also
Regards

Shalini Chopra said...

humor has given way to romance and suspense...excellent

Anonymous said...

very well written..waiting 4 concluding part

Ria Taneja said...

romance part has been well dealt with so has been the suspense,,,well written sir

Ria Taneja said...

looking forward 2 conclusive part

Anonymous said...

both parts are well written

Tracy said...

liked both the parts equally
good keep it up!!

Anonymous said...

nicely written
Kudos

Anonymous said...

well written..liked the romantic part and sense of humor in first part...
Regards

Dr.Nishi Chauhan said...

nice one avi..wonder hw good u r at sevaral things....
First part i read n find it wud be humor but now after some romance n suspense seems getting better
good keep it up

Anonymous said...

nice reading both parts sir..humor,romance and suspense all stuff here.Good writting skills,reader friendly
Keep it up

tripti said...

Written very professionaly , consider writing a fiction novel, will be a hit for sure .

Rashmi said...

very well written, romance part was best dealt with, cud have made second part more better by describing the scene, u rushed 2 third part 4 obvious reason.....anyway still very excellent writting...
keep it up

Ritu said...

both agree and disagree with rashmi Agree bcoz third part was descriptive so reat specially second one needed 2 be one like that,DISAGREE becuase it wud have made it too long.
Obviously romance part was well described that wats excites and attracts young readers no one wnats to raed daily family quarrel but sir u cud have put ur sense of humor in this fite as u did in first part
still makes a lovely read.........too good
Regards

अविनाश said...

@rashmi Thx 4 valuable comment, yes cud have made the second part descriptive butit wud have made it too long, still cud have done it, will keep ur suggestion in mind
Thx & Reagrds

अविनाश said...

@ritu
again due to obvious resaon made third part long as i wanted to describe it properly.Yes agree with u thatcud have added some humor in quarrel but wanted to make intense this second part so avoided it again due to fear that it wud make it long kept its short. thx 4 ur suggesion n i welcome critical suggestions more
Thx & Regards

अविनाश said...

@Tripti
thx 4 precious comment
Regards

Ashok said...

itna nahi pata padh ke achha laga...that sud be enuf avi
Good work keep it up

Mehnaaz said...

agree wid u sir dat it wud have made second part n entire fiction too lone but u cud have easily added some lines , say 3-4 lines in secondscene and 2-3 in first, wenever mind reading excellent extra lines as in third scene, wud love 2 see urs sense of humor here also...its not that if u want 2 make aprt intense and u have added or divided into 3 diffrent scens u cud have taken a scene and then decided which scene will look like in which fashion..so u can consider ritu's suggestion
still must say excellent writting skills as u r writting fiction 4 first tiem...its diffrent writting real life experiences and a fiction
Third part was outstanding, i felt it deep inside
Good keep it up
Regards

Alec said...

first of all congrats and thanks for beautiful writting.

Now about cricism in above comments, ist fair in some sense, secon scene was short so jusr 2 more descriptive lines wud have made it look much better...third was long so description was long...any way well written

ABOUT ROMANTIC PART
It was best of both previous and this one, in first u did excellent work with comic sense while in this romance was felt deep inside, dats wat makes a good writer when u start feeling the secen then its success 4 writer, so u did that thing nicely, hats off 2 u
Keep the good work, looking 4ward 2 conclusive part
Reagrds

Austeen Sufi said...

nice reading both the parts, at some points u refelected like a true professional.
very good writing skills,
regards

Tulip Banerjee said...

good reding both the parts
looking 4wrd 2 concluding part
regards

Er. Paayal Sharma said...

there is absolutely no doubt that first part was very well written so hats of 2 u 4 dat
Regarding this one i liked the most of it specially Scene III, it was some professional work in it, scene II lacked some description as pointed out by many readers it cud have been more descriptive, agree with them but overall it was good reading

At some points when u feel part of a story than its bulls eye for writer, congrats for a sucessful writing, looking 4ward to the conclusive part
Regards

Dr. Aradhna Awasthi said...
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Ria Taneja said...

When two people decide to get a divorce, it isn't a sign that they "don't understand" one another, but a sign that they have, at last, begun to.

अविनाश said...

@mehnaaaz
thx 4 u comments and suggestion, agree with u that ploting n description lacked in second half, i love candid crticism, its even better ven its accompanied with suggestion. Thanks again
Regards

अविनाश said...

@ alec
thnaks for suggestions and ur valuable comments. keep visiting
Regards

अविनाश said...

@paayal
thx 4 comment n encouragement
Regards

अविनाश said...

@ aradhana
thx dear 4 ur support
regards

अविनाश said...

@all thx a lot to all readers
Regards

Rohit Sharma said...

lage raho, bachho ko bigaad do, saare naalayak hai

अनु मिश्रा said...

बहुत अच्छा लिखा है आपने, पहले पार्ट मे व्यंग के साथ एक संकेत था की ये कहानी आगे चल के गंभीर होगी, तो दूसरे पार्ट मे एक अच्छा कहानी निकल के आया. प्यार को अनमोल पलो के आपने एक अच्छे भाषा मे आँखो के सामने ला दिया, सीन 3 मे एक अच्छे बात ये रही की सारे चीज़े आँखो के सामने आया जो की एक बड़ी बात है भाषा के लिए, पढ़ के अच्छा लग.scene 2 मे थोडा और विवरण होना था. लेकिन कुल मिला के एक अच्छे कहानी अभी तक. बहुत हे अच्छी कहानी. सुंदर और सफ़ल प्रयास. इसके अंत का इंतेज़ार रहेगा
धन्यवाद

Anonymous said...

Divorce is the psychological equivalent of a triple coronary by-pass. After such a monumental assault on the heart, it takes years to amend all the habits and attitudes that led up to it.

Anonymous said...

To be happy with a man you must understand him a lot and love him a little. To be happy with a woman you must love her a lot and not try to understand her at all.

Anonymous said...

loved reading it

Dr. Aradhna Awasthi said...
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Dr. Aradhna said...

hey guys this man is engineer if u all dont know, so its very good effort from him, just love his versatile writting skills, come on he is writting hindi & english poem, fiction, politics, humor, econmy science & tech n many more

Regading this fiction the first part was humoric read yet intense one, it was sensed that story will go to some serious end .

In second part it started well, just second part was bit less descriptive, then came the best part Scene III, here he wrote like true professional like in first part of fiuction while reading scene III i felt the room and irs decoration rite in front of my eyes, thats really best part....

Nice avi keep it up
Regards

Dr. Neha Srivastav said...

it was lovely reading both the parts. first part was humorus still gave a hint of things to come. its was perferct in my opinion.

Regading this part. Its well written again as we all sud understand that its a blog and not a novel so its been shortened 4 readers sake only. I understand wat others are trying to say about describing scene II then thr will be many such things say like describing court premises in scene I. more ts written more lenghty it gets.

Hatts of 2 u for such a lovely writting.
Regards

Anonymous said...

To be happy with a man you must understand him a lot and love him a little. To be happy with a woman you must love her a lot and not try to understand her at all

Anonymous said...

nicely written sir. it was gr8 2 see that an engineer can write such a nice thrillingstory full of humor,romance n suspense.waiting 4 conclusing part
Regards

Anonymous said...

nice one....well written

अविनाश said...

@neha
Thanks for your encouraging word.

Dr. Palki Vajpayee said...

liked ur shear writting and suspnese skills. Brahma, Vishnu & Mahes lines were out standing.Good keep it up.
Regards

Preeti said...

nice reading both the parts, looking 4wars 2 final one
It is an unfortunate fact that divorce has become commonplace in our society. The pain and anguish this is created in a divorce has a ripple effect on the family unit. Often family members are confused as how to act around the now divorced couple. Children are often used as pawns between their father and mother. Each one may try to gain the upper hand in the battle for their children's affection. Getting divorced may be necessary in cases when a relationship cannot be salvaged. However, the couple should keep in mind that the whole family unit will be affected by this change.

Good skill. Keep it up!!
Regards

Anonymous said...

When I was only two years old,
My daddy went away.
He swore he'd always love me,
But he said he couldn't stay.
Days turned into weeks
And weeks turned into years.
I never saw my father,
He never saw my tears.
He never read me bedtime stories
Or tucked me in at night.
He never showed up for my birthdays,
But I always hoped he might.
He missed my first day of kindergarden
And all of my school plays.
He doesn't know how smart I am,
My report cards full of A's.
Sometimes I want to call him
To say Hey Dad I'm still alive!
I'll be 16 years old soon,
Will you teach me how to drive?
It’s almost time for college,
The years go by so fast.
I'm looking forward to my future,
But I'm still trapped within my past.
I guess I'll never understand,
Did I do something bad?
My parents got divorced,
But why did I lose my dad?

Anonymous said...

I miss him mom
I want him back
I want to go see him
I don't care if you take me
Or if he comes to get me
I don't get why you don't
Want us to see him
Can't you two just get along
I don't care if you guys
Fight, Yell, or even scream
I just want to see him
I don't care if you take me
Or if he comes to get me
I miss him
And i just want my daddy back

Richa Saxena said...

its was intresting reading both the parts, liked the humoric fight in first hal and now suspense n utter romance in this one, cant wait to know wtas next.Excellent sir

Regards

Anonymous said...

nice reading both parts

Anonymous said...

well written, nice way of prsenting extra martial affirs, hope u conclude with its affects and give some messag with your beautiful writting skills.
Regards

अविनाश said...

@Dr Palki
Thx 4 ur valuable comments
Regards

अविनाश said...

@Preeti
Thx for ur comments and shring ur valuable thoughts. likedwhat u said
Thanks again & Regards

अविनाश said...

@Richa
Thx for visiting the blog and ur comments, hope u dont have to wait for too long as i write the concluding part soon
Regards

अविनाश said...

@ to the person who wrote peom
Thanks 4 hsraing such a beautiful poem
Regards

Femin Susan said...

hey!
very exiting and happy story..it was very interesting to read both the parts. thanks for sharing.
cheers!

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